You have great writing skills but I wouldn't swear in the paper if I were you. I'd exchange the word for "messing" or something that wouldn't be seen as crude. I wouldn't risk it. But other than that it's great. Good luck in your exams!
Well, I got a band 6 (like 94% or something for Wilfred Owens...I hate poetry) in English for my last assessment. I came first....but I also moved from advanced to standard because my teacher is a psycho and I couldn't understand her work, thus my expected level of English was essentially higher...